Audience Feedback for our First Edit

When Chloe and I asked people what they though of our first edit, lots of people told us it was very good, that it obviously need some work but the overall outline was very good. We have had feedback from friends, family, other students in our class and our teacher. Our teacher has given up very helpful constructive criticisms, and Chloe and I are working through this and trying to improve.

Miss has told us that the shots we have used are very good but some of them are slightly out of focus, such as the close up of the eye and will need re filming, Chloe and I have planned to re film these shots on Sunday 17th January as this is when Charlotte's house is free again. Also at the send of the scene their is a voice over of a male voice on a phone, miss has told us that this needs to be louder, so that its clear enough to hear. 

Miss has also told us that the music is too sinister for just the opening sequence and where I agree the music is very sinister I feel that its the perfect amount to go with the scene. However hearing this feedback me and Chloe did look for alternatives but found nothing that could fit quite as well. when we asked other students from the class they said that the music fit really well.

Miss also told us that the male character is too 'cliche' and that he wasnt necessary to the scene. But we feel as he is crucial and wont be taking him out.